Thursday, October 7, 2010
Are the Children Invading Boo's Privacy (COMPLETE)
An essay about one of To Kill a Mocking Birds main characters
David Garbo
Mr. Salsich
Essay#4
10/7/10
Wanting something badly can be extremely annoying. The children want Boo to come out very badly, but you can't always get want you want. In this case I don't think the children will get what they want. I think they are just tying way to hard.
(TS)The children want Boo Radley to come out of his house, hoping that they could get a glimpse of him, willing to run any risk to see him, wishing they could meet him.(SD)Towards the very beginning of the book I didn't think the children were invading Boo's privacy.(CM)After a few times the children started to break in and send Boo messages it started to get out of hand.(CM)Playing a few fun jokes or games on your neighbors is okay, but when you do it every day it starts to get extremely annoying for the house owner.(SD)The children started off being curious to see Boo and what he looks like. (CM) Now the kids are breaking into his property and doing things that are totally unnecessary. (CM) Also what they are doing is illegal, not just annoying. (SD) The children should stop doing these things to Boo and let him live his life how he wants. (CM) If a few kids were stalking you everyday it would become annoying right? (CM) Boo Radley doesn't seem to be bothering anybody, so why should the children have to bother him? (CS) Yes, I do think Boo is a very strange man, and yes I do think the children are invading Boo's privacy.
I believe if someone does something bad to you, you deserve to do something back. Boo has never done anything wrong to the children so why should the children be doing something wrong to him. Hopefully Boo doesn't think the same way I do and try to get revenge on the children.
By:David Garbo Jr.
Self Assessment
Issue I'm working on: One thing that is often hard for me is spelling and grammar, such as comma splices and run on sentences. From my point of view this essay doesn't have any run on sentences.
Strong Point: A strong point in my essay is definitely my topic. It gives a good image in your head and also includes participles.
Weak point: A week point is the sentence after my Introduction. I said, " I think" to many times. This makes me look very in confident on my writing.
Grade I deserve: I think I deserve a B- on this essay. It shows shows some problems but I believe it flows very nicely.
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David,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your introduction paragraph because you made the example of how you "can't always get what you want" which is definitely frustrating to Jem, Scout and Dill regarding not seeing Boo. I suggest you check your spelling, for example:tying should be trying and want should be what.I would also suggest that you describe a little more about why you think Boo Radley is a strange person because it would be interesting to hear what you think about him.
10/12/10
ReplyDeleteDaniel D’Amato
I really like your last sentence in your last paragraph, it really says that you have an idea that you don’t want to happen that you could look for wile your reading TKAM. In your first paragraph you have a spelling error that I think would be good to change. Also I don’t quite remember your first (CM) in the book, so maybe if would want to go back in the book to see if the children sent messages in any way to Boo Radley.