Comparing Ms. Caroline and Aticus as Teachers, Now polished

David Garbo

English 8B

Mr. Salsich

9/29/10

                                                                     Comparing two Teachers:
                                                          An Essay about Comparing two Teachers.

Teaching to me seems like an art form. To make extremely smart and hard working students, the teacher must work hard. Scout's father Atticus, seems like one of those working teachers to me, a much harder worker than Miss Caroline.

 (TS) Scout’s father, Atticus, teaches much better than her first grade teacher, Miss Caroline. (SD) Miss Caroline is way too up tight and unrelaxed. (CM) In my opinion, a teacher makes the students feel comfortable during class, so the students don’t worry about being yelled at all the time. (CM) If Miss Caroline wasn’t so inflexible during class, her student Walter Cunningham, wouldn’t have said, “Ain’t no snot-nosed slut ever gunna make me do nothing.” (SD)Scout is only in 1st grade and already knows how to read better than anyone else in her class. (CM) This shows that Atticus does know what he’s doing much better than Miss Caroline when he reads to Scout every night. (CM) Miss Caroline insists on teaching Scout the basics of reading when Scout already knows how to read. Then she told Scout that Atticus is a bad teacher when she says, “Scout, I don’t want your father teaching you anymore.” (SD) Miss Caroline is just as tough on herself. (CM) She takes things too personally. (CM) One day after a bad class, Miss Caroline was very upset because Walter Cunningham said some mean things to her. He spoke while walking out the door,  “ He waited until he was sure she was crying then left.” (CM) A good teacher remains positive and in control at all times. (CM) You must be positive about your class to do well, and Miss Caroline definitely isn’t. (CS) It all comes down to being agreeable to your students so your students are nice to you.


Although Miss Caroline isn't a very good teacher it is great that she is trying hard. Pressure can really make a person crack, and in this case, Miss Caroline just couldn't take it anymore.




Self Assessment:

Something I'm working on: One thing I am still working on are comma splices. I don't believe i have any in this essay which is a big step forward for me. 
Strong point: A strong point in my essay I think is the last chunk. The last chunk gets the point across and gives a good reason why Ms. Caroline isn't an amazing teacher.
Weak Point: A weak point in my essay is definitely the beginning of my second chuck. In the beginning of this chunk it gets a little confusing.
Grade I deserve: I think I deserve a B- for this essay. This means it has its weak points but shows a lot of potential.

A Strange Person Final Essay

English 8B

David Garbo

9/23/10

Mr. Salsich

            Strange people are simply a part of the way we live. Every place in the world has at least 1 very strange person. In the following I will explain to you a strange person that has been around in my neighborhood for a long time, someone that I pretty much grew up with.

            (TS) When I think of a strange person I think of a homeless man named Spike that hangs out in downtown Mystic. (SD) One thing that is really odd about Spike is his posture. (CM) One reason why I think Spike's posture is odd is because his back curves like a hunchback. (CM) Even though Spike is about the same age as my dad, he appears to be much older because of the way he walks. (SD) Although Spike is homeless, his fashion sense is apparent. (CM) This is obvious because every time I see him he is wearing a lot of jewelry. (CM) Every once in a while Spike gathers up enough money to go into my mother's store to buy a charm or a bead for his bracelets. (SD) Spike obviously doesn't have anywhere to stay so he carries all his belongings in a bright orange backpack wherever he goes. (CM) Spike's backpack looks like it was rolled around in mud. (CM) Just like his backpack Spike also appears not to be very clean. (CS) Spike used to work with my mom at a print shop, so at one point Spike was an average "Joe" like everyone else.

            For me this essay was a great learning experience. Writing this essay intrigued me to try my absolute hardest in school, and never give up no matter what.

1. Issue I'm working on: One issue I'm working on is comma splices. I really need to pay attention and make sure there are no comma splices in my essays.

2. One strong point in my essay: One strong point in my essay i think was the introduction. I think the introduction explains very well what is going to happen in the essay.

3: A week point in my essay is the conclusion. The conclusion was very tough for me and I don't think I did a very good job on it.

4. I think a good grade for this essay is a C+. A C+ shows that I tried hard but I had my weak points.

"Bonfire" by Craig Morgan

David

English 8b

1st complete essay

                 When I think of summer, I think of music. Music is an excellent way to relax and enjoy the day ahead of you, or to enjoy the whole year ahead like I will be in the school year of 2011. Whether you are working hard all day, or partying, music is the best way to make your day interesting. For example, this summer I did a lot of construction work. To help me pass the time, I listened to a lot of music. The song that represents summer to me is "Bonfire" by Craig Morgan.
                     (TS) Going back to school was hard for me, because I was going to miss not having the freedom I had over the summer. (SD) In the song "Bonfire" by Craig Morgan, the lyrics say, "won't sleep till dawn gonna party right down to the wire, were all hangin at the bonfire." (CM) This reminds me a lot of the summer and how I hung with my friends and partied. (CM) This summer I also went to North Carolina for a big race; after the race. One hung out around a big bonfire which obviously relates to the song "Bonfire". (SD) Summer was fun while it lasted but now I have a challenge to look forward to in 8th grade. (CM) One big project I can look forward to is the assessment project, although it wont be very easy it will be a great challenge for me to tackle. (CM) I worry that 8th grade is going to be very hard for me because of the amount of homework and big projects, but I believe I will get through it okay. (SD) Every party I have gone to has had lots of event changes; this is what I think 8th grade is going to be like. (CM) School is tough and always has been, but school isn't a party it is for learning. (CM) Every new school year I go to I am always a little bit nervous, just like a party, you never know if you will meet anyone new that you will like. (CS) School isn't a party, but sometimes can be just as fun as one, hopefully this year I will have a blast!
                           Out of 500 of my songs, the song, “Bonfire” is one of the best examples of summer I could find. From hanging out around the bonfire with my friends to going to parties, this summer was a blast! All I can say now is, I can't wait till next year.

A Strange Person

English 8B

David Garbo

9/23/10

Mr. Salsich                                             

           

            (TS) When I think of a strange person I think of a homeless man named Spike that hangs out in downtown Mystic. (SD) One thing that is really odd about Spike is his posture. (CM) One reason why I think Spike's posture is odd is because his back curves like a hunchback. (CM) Even though Spike is about the same age as my dad, he appears to be much older because of the way he walks. (SD) Although Spike is homeless, his fashion sense is apparent. (CM) This is obvious because every time I see him he is wearing a lot of jewelry. (CM) Every once in a while Spike gathers up enough money to go into my mother's store to buy a charm or a bead for his bracelets. (SD) Spike obviously doesn't have anywhere to stay so he carries all his belongings in a bright orange backpack wherever he goes. (CM) Spike's backpack looks like it was rolled around in mud. (CM) Just like his backpack Spike also appears not to be very clean. (CS) Spike used to work with my mom at a print shop, so at one point Spike was an average "Joe" like everyone else.

What do I think the first page of a novel should do. (edited virsion)

 By: David Garborcauskas

            (TS) A novel's first page should reel the reader into the story by grabbing your attention immediately. (SD) An exciting event is always important in the beginning of a book. (CM) An event that is funny, scary or interesting will hook the reader right from the start. (CM) For example, (assonance) The first sentence of the Jungle Book, by Rudyard Kipling, "This is the our of pride and power, talon and tush and claw". After reading this sentence you will probably want to know what is going to happen next. (SD) I also think that the first page of a novel should introduce the main character in the story. (CM) I haven't read many books in my lifetime but the few that I have read seemed like they were being rushed and didn't explain what the story was going to be about before the story started. (CM) On the other hand, some of my favorite books have started off with an introduction of the main character and an exciting event, such as, the story Hatchet, by Gary Paulsen. The main character, Brian, a boy about my age, crashes in the Canadian wilderness after the plane plunges when the pilot has a heart attack.(Alliteration) (SD) The beginning pages of a novel should simply be the beginning of a great story. (CM) The first page should be a brief introduction telling the reader what and who the story is about. (CM) Grabbing the reader and making them feel like they are actually in the story is crucial, or the reader might put the book down! (CS) When I race my racecars at the local speedway, my dad always says to me that I can't win on the first lap, but I can lose. I think the same way about novel, the author can win on the first page but he/she can also lose.

What do I think the first page of a novel should do.

What do I think the first page of a novel should do.

            (TS) A novels first page should grab your attention to suck the reader into the story immediately. (SD) Starting off a book or an essay is always hard for me. (CM) One thing that I think is very important is something funny or interesting that will hook the reader right from the start. (CM) For example, (assonance) Sammy sprinkled his sprinkles all over his luscious lips. After reading this sentence you will probably want to know what is going to happen next. (SD) I also think that the first page of a novel should have a brief overview of the main characters that are in the story. (CM) I haven't read many books in my lifetime but the few that I have read seemed like they were being rushed and didn't explain what the story was going to be about before the story started. (CM) Some of my favorite books have started off with an introduction of the main character, such as, "Hello, my name is" and so fourth. (SD) The beginning pages of a novel should simply be the beginning of a great story. (CM) The first page should be a brief introduction telling the reader what and who the story is about. (CM) Grabbing the reader and making them feel like they are actually in the story is crucial, or the reader might put the book down! (CS) When I race my race cars at the local speedway my dad always says to me that I can't win on the first lap, but I can lose, I think the same way about novels except for the opposite, the author can win on the first page but he/she can also lose.

By: David Garborcauskas